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Hey...
Can we just  pretend ?
Like we did when we were kids?
I can pretend to be strong
And use these twigs
To build a mansion for you
So large and beautiful
That you'll have everything you need.
I can pretend to be smart
And I'll teach you new things every day
Gently widening you eyes
To the world around you.
I can pretend to be a musician
Your own private concerto
Sing lullabies to you each night
With the few notes I know.
I can pretend to be funny
And have a witty criticism
For all the things you dislike
And sweetly teasing you
Till you gift me with your smile.
I can pretend be wise
Have an answer for all your problem
And  advice that never fails.
I can  pretend to be a cook
And delicately create
Mudpies for you to eat
As though they  were gourmet meals.
I can pretend to be someone I'm not
Someone who's beautiful or amazing or kind
Someone  who won't let you down
Someone who won't break your heart
Someone  who can give you everything
You could ever want
Someone  who won't treat you
Like your the most precious thing in the world
I can be anyone you want me to be
For  as long as you'd want me

So can you pretend  too...
Just for  a little while?
That you're happy...
That you love me?
That's all I need
Even if its just pretend.
I originally was writing a piece about two lovers playing "house" together but ummmm it turned into this :shrug: . No cover this time so hope it does okay. Hope everyone enjoys :D.
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ScarletMe Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2013
I really enjoyed the start, although the punctuation kind of interrupted the flow for me. The examples were really sweet and they appealed to me. 
You made me wish what you wanted by sharing a feeling many have.
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TheGirlInPurple20 Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2013
Very nice. I enjoyed it. :) 
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PWheartgal Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2013   General Artist
So beautiful, well done :)
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NinjaGhostTM Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
simply beautiful
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Akira-Izusa Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I love the beginning with the examples :)
But in the end everyoe should always be honest with each other and not just pretend to. ~
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VictorHugo Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2013  Professional Digital Artist
beautiful. Thatīs what we men do everyday. We endure and pretend to be heroes to protect our princesses.
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Yorulla Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I'd love to use this poem in a drawing. so inspiring and lovely.. ;A; and saaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaad qAq
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K-B-Clarke Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This... Moves me. specially since it hit kinda close to home ;^^
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Kamaari Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This is beautiful
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914four Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
"Love is an irresistible desire to be irresistibly desired. " - Robert Frost 
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lavalamplama Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2013
this reaaly really reminded me of the anime Ano Hana
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SuperSonicBrosX Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2013
Loved it. Just loved it Amazing
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22pianos1saloon Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
:) I like your poem
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city-kings Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2013  Student Digital Artist

i find it wierd how

i can take the last two verses and fit in into everything about me

im not beautiful

nor am i someone who will brighten up your day

im shy and timid

and tend to keep to myself most of the time

but when im around the two people im glad to call friends

i push back everything thats happening

and smile...

so that they smile and wont question or feel worried

why..?

i come home to be called useless

stupid

a bitch at times

by the same person my father loves

and yet he never catches her saying it

ive been pushed around

ive been called good for nothing

a fucking runt

and ive had her say to me " everytime i look at you all i see is your fathers dick up your mothers ass"

but you know what

i keep my problems to myself in the real world,

and because of the little slip ups i have

like making a depressed face

or just seeming gloomy

people tend to worry..

so i pretend to be okay

to be fine

i lie to my real mother and tell her

'i miss you im doing just fine here, my step-mother is nice and dad is still..well dad'

and she notices

because she always asks

'its like everytime i talk to you...you try to hide from me..'

ive heard those words so many times..

and yet

if you ever see me smile

you think i have i perfect life

your wrong.. the smile you see masking my face each day is fake

i wish there was someone who could see that

...

im shy and timid

and tend to keep to myself most of the time

is being this way wrong?

am i doing something wrong?

i dont get it

ive been called wierd

ive been told to go sit in a corner

at my own familys parties

because im shy

and dont talk much.

why..

because im afraid

that the mask i wear to pretend im okay

might fall and ill lose it so for now

even if you hate my guts

can you pretend too...
Just for a little while?
That you're happy...
That you love me?
That's all I need
Even if its just pretend

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CrumbledWings Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2013
Wow well i must admit what you wrote was far more heart felt than my poem. And i'm sorry about your situation T.T but at least you got two friends that really do love you and don't need to pretend. That's more than some people have.
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Kamaari Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I've had a problem similar before, let me know if you need to talk. Here's my chatroom chat.deviantart.com/chat/OneWi…
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Ayukiyama Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:happycry:
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Finland1010 Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2013
Amazing
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Serenesouls27 Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow ! I loved it ^^
Its one of those poems that I would love to read it again and again.
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SciFi-meets-Fantasy Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is GREAT!! The emotion is powerful, the moral heartfelt. Just beautiful. ^^;
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Ruphira Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
This made me tear up. I thought of my boyfriend, whom I love dearly and suffers from depression. Thank you.
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Kyoky-San Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
So honest
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ChemicalInk Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2013  Student General Artist
i know this is suppose to be about lovers, but for me it reminds me of my past relationship with my cousin V.V 

very raw poem, good job! :)
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Aqureshi1 Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2013
Wow.......the emotion is so.......wow.....Llama Emoji 44 (Bleh) 
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cyimang Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow... Great work:clap:
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Ariamay123 Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2013
It's lovely! :)
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TheOneAndOnly-K Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Awwwwwww...
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