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I test it out in the mirror
The face I want them to see...
The gentle smile
Blesses me falsely
Even to my tear filled eyes,
But I won't let it fall
I try to make it shine more broadly
To be sure they know,
When they finally see me
Gaze into my unseeing eyes
And see the peaceful wonder
Left behind in my smile,   
That I'm in someplace
Far better than here
Or...
At least...
Someplace 
Free of pain.
Someplace that I can genuinely
smile.
That's all
I want them to see.
This was originally a long poem about a girl killing herself through cold water submergence but then i deleted most of it and left this. Hope everyone enjoys.
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Deepizzaguy Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2014
Super poem. It made me feel better.
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LVRen Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2014  Student General Artist
I really like the way this flows.

Before I even read the genre all that I could think was, "This would be an awesome spoken word piece!".
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PamFreak101 Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2014
Omg I love this! It's very strong! 
Absolutely love the way you started it!  
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ArcNovaXIII Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
good poem! i have to say the hiding behind a mask theory is strong in this one.
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kidko123 Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I think you're missing a little "in" in the first line.
Great poem~
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