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Hear A Mouse's Roar by CrumbledWings Hear A Mouse's Roar by CrumbledWings

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The awesome cover was made by *WilsonWJr . Alright i was reading this really weird philological novel and one line made me want to write this piece. The main character had be called a mouse and he said "while i may be among lions, they will all hear a mouse's roar". And so i added a less insane premise and storybook rhyming and booom . And new poem. Hope everyone likes :D
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The words flow well together and has it's own rhythm, a tactic that's difficult for some writers yet you performed it with grace! The poem/story itself is very simple yet makes quite an impact in it's own way, for who would of thought a mouse roaring? The emotion in the piece, whether you intended there to be one or not, had me place myself in the mouse's own shoes (or rather, paws) and feel what it felt, small and insignificant from those who were bigger, and enraged that they would underestimate it as such, and could be much more. This piece makes me think it can pass as a short story meant to teach others that you don't have to be big or strong to be brave, great, etc, or even the most magnificent of things can come from the smallest of packages. Of course that could simply be the imagination of the mind and mean something completely different, but isn't that the point of writing?

All in all, great work!
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SoloNightWriter Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2013
Lovely little story you have here! I absolutely adore the lesson being taught here, the way it's presented, and the pacing of it's presentation. Definitely a great story all around, just so well made! It feels like I'm reading a published poem written by a paid author, it's something special right here!
Roy02 Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
beautiful :)
plazadelpirul Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
this is really good
candyzombielord Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
great work.
Ridderkvinden Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2013
So great! :D It is very sweet! I like how it is almost a story in itself, and how it evokes images in the mind when reading it! Good piece of work! :D
Kry-n-37 Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2013   General Artist
This is a beautiful piece of literature. :dalove:
angrboda555 Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2013
I really like the storybook rhyme. it's a very cute poem
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