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Hey remember me?
I'm lonely
Without anyone to talk to,
Yeah we met last week
I'm so glad
You actually remembered me.

Hey remember me?
I'm happy
That we could hang out.
I know it might
Seem a bit strange to ask
But are we friends?
Yeah?!
Thank goodness
Now I can be at ease
You’re really here with me
It wasn't just a tease.

Hey remember me?
I'm weird
Just a little bit though
I thought you liked me
Because of that
Because of the way I am
Right?

Hey remember me?
I'm trying
To keep up a smile
But it’s getting pretty hard
Because every once in awhile
It seems like all you want
Is for me to cry.
Is that what a friend does?

Hey remember me?
Please say you do
I'm your friend
And all that entails
So I can take them
All your continual assails
As long as you remember me
I doubt my heart will fail.

Hey remember me?
I'm being forgotten
Though I suppose that means you don't
You never do
Never even try to
Even after all I've begged of you
Even after all we've been through
You treat me like I'm nothing
Is that all I really am to you?

Hey remember me?
No?
You never really did
And while I prayed for friendship
And fought for your love
Asked to be remembered,
You never really remembered me,
And there's no need for you to know
I'm me and I always will be
Whether or not you remember me.
This was specifically  written for remembermeforawesome :iconremembermeforawesome: . Its another one of my free request pieces. If you liked it and want me to help to express some of your thoughts just leave a comment asking or note me .

The only thing I didnt like about it was the structure i ended up using , i wanted more flow and rhyming T.T alright hope everyone enjoys XD

UPDATE: wow it reached front page reallllllyyy wasn't expecting that
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lucarloroq Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2014
Loved it! One of these days i'll note you, i wanna see how you would express my feelings. xD

Btw, why don't you check my gallery?

Cheers
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Autumn-Fest Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2014  Student Traditional Artist
Friends beaten me up mentally....I feel like I have no sense of myself.....A friend broke my heart recently.....gonna send her this and maybe she'll understand that I am forgotten...but that is what everyone thinks already.......*siigghh*
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DuskTheDarkwolf Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2014
This reminds me of someone I used to be friends with. Now it's like I never existed to him... :(
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Meadowstar01 Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I just looked back on this, and I would like to say that you did a really good job on this poem! It's something I also feel that I can relate to as well. Nice job!
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MMORPGWizard Featured By Owner May 26, 2014  Hobbyist Artist
OH MY GOSH THAT BROKE MY HEART, YOU NEED A FRIEND?
OF COURSE I'LL BE YOUR FRIEND!
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Ricardo-Orozco Featured By Owner May 21, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
reading this again made me almost cry.
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Flightless-Wingz Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
This is amazing, a sharp jab to the heart but so worth reading. It brings up pain I'm still trying to get over, but in a helpful way. You are truly talented
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TheJulesRules Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
This hits home for me. :( Thank you.
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Sorcorer Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2014
My heart dropped to the floor, but it was worth it. I love how with each stanza the other person seemed to forget about the speaker more and more.
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Seas-of-Emerald Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow...I can really relate to this. But I am at a loss for words, here. I think it flowed really nicely, and I like the rhyme scheme here. This is too amazing for words AHHHHHH :la:
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wiz2525 Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
Nice piece!  Very expressive.
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AtrociousLamb Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2014  Professional Artist
I love it ...aw :huggle:
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:iconricardo-orozco:
Ricardo-Orozco Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
this made me feel so amazing and the emotion was well contained into the lines so good job :)
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wingedalchemist2961 Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
IDK i kinda think of Eminem rapping this, in like a sad/angry voice haha. Not the crude Eminem but the emotional Eminem.. (like in Beautiful etc)

This was beautifully written, i thought that the flow and rhyming was perfect! It wasn't too structured, so it wasn't choppy. SO much emotion
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EmeraldGuardian-04 Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist

Aww.. :saddummy: I remember how I felt when I'm being forgotten..


I love this piece. It's very beautiful. :huggle:

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chaosheart13 Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2014
Well, that one hit right in the feels. Dunno why, but I feel like this poem is reaching out to the people who've been "forgotten," reminding them they are not alone. I enjoyed this a lot. :)
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VanePyroRocker Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2014  Student General Artist
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Beautiful, pretty cool, God...I have no words to describe it. Meow :3 :happybounce: 
I simply love it -it could be a song- xD
And don't worry for the structure, it's very good.
Great job!

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Dickstroya Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2014  Student General Artist
Omg I'm about to cry because this is so pretty and meaningful and I actually feel like this 
Perf work! ;v; 
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gogitaFroggies1 Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2014  Student Digital Artist
you said that you don't like the structure, however I think that it really adds to the feelings of desperation and resignation which this poem embodies
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BlackDraagon Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2014  Professional General Artist
Beautiful
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captainisabella Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2014
Thanks You sum Up my life real well
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NightComet Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
This has happened to me before and is happening to me right now. This poem is simply beautiful and truly captures the emotions of what it feels like to be forgotten. Great work :heart:
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ArtsyGurl4 Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2014
Amazing. Simply amazing.
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Vol-Jin Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2014
This is why I don't make an effort to be friends with anyone. I am not a guy you can easily remember, and even if I am it's not in a favorable way. I hope one day you are remembered, :iconsaluteplz:
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De7h1nK13 Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
i like the structure it gives it a broken, freantic rhythm:pineapplestaredrive: 
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DarkLover33 Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2014   Writer
This is very beautiful and touching. Reminds me of how I used to be. Anyways you wrote of that experience in an impressive and excellent way
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Lady-Buffy Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2014
Oh I know exactly how it feels... And I can say it's not a good feeling =D
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flygirlll26262 Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2014   Artisan Crafter
Wow, that sounds like what I used to be like, nobody ever remembered me...
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remembermeforawesome Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
:iconsniffplz: Thanks so much! Your writing was really great, and my direction you totally got. Can we collaborate again, if you want?
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odDistortion Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
This is a beautiful piece- and I am so glad it got onto the first page- work like this deserves to be seen.
I hope this encourages you to write more- I'll certainly be looking out for it! ^^
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shelleypalmer Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I think this one got to me.  Repeating the words 'Hey remember me' gave it so much emotional impact.
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Biasanti Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2014
this is my entire life. literally. it's currently happening to me right now. i'm being forgotten. :(
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The-Drabbit-trainer Featured By Owner May 3, 2014
Me too...I can relate... :(
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LadyNoiraile Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2014
This is touching, true and inspiring.
The text nicely carries you along from stanza to stanza, keeping you excited as the repeated first line of every new verse feels like a curtain opening to the next scene, with the reader getting more anxious every time on what might happen next. Many of us have been there, I suppose, already knowing before the poem is finished that this might lead to no good ending.

I think you very well deserve making it to the front page with this piece. :clap:
May your work get recognized even further!
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FoFaFie Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2014
its sad but its got meaning... I can certainly appreciate that.
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Shadowp09 Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2014  Student Writer
I rather enjoyed this. It's nicely written. It has good flow to it. It's also very relatable. I can't count how many times I've lost contact with a friend. I've been in this situation too many times. Some people act like they want to be your friend and then they just disappear on you. This poem portrays that very well.
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mortalshinobi Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2014
impressive feeling.  it's something i think a lot of people have gone through before.  nice job expressing it poetically.
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Meadowstar01 Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
This is REALLY good, and very relatable too! You also expressed the emotions in this poem very well. Nice job! :)

This deserves a Daily Deviation.
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ShadowBionics Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Usually I'm kinda shy about leaving comments on stuff by people I don't know very well. I read this however and I felt I ought to leave some kind of comment. I can relate very well to this, sadly as I've been in many situations like this that all end the same. I even had to say farewell to one of my best friends as she no longer needed me or even remembered me. I'm not such a memorable person, I guess.

It is a very beautiful and well-written piece with a very clear and emotional message, and very easily relatable to people who have had these feelings of a broken heart. 
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Jony97 Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2014
This explains my relationship with someone perfectly..
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Dickstroya Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2014  Student General Artist
Omg same here ;n;
Have a nice day~~
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snowywolf13 Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
This totally speaks to me. I love how casual it is, especially since it's something we probably all go through.
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PsychicHexo Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I really like this! It reminds me of something I would write :)
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o0Sweet-Tea0o Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2014  Student Writer
I Loved this ^^
I can relate to this well QAQ
still amazing work~
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remonru Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2014
I really liked it. It's touching, and veryyyyyy relateable :iconureshii-go-on-plz:
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LMW-Creations Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
So beautifully relateable... You just took some iffy memories of my own and made them seem a little bit more better just from your words.

The structure isn't too bad. It flowed pretty well, and the rhyming you used was nice. :meow:
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SteampunkTardis Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
amazing..
simply amazing, keep doing things as such..
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