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When you see her cry
you get a rag,
a gentle delicate clothe
lovingly grasp her hand
and dab its tip
to dry each tear as they come
and ask each drop
why it'd leave
such beautiful eyes.

If she wishes 
to be in the sky
Tell her to go 
Take the sun ransom
And replace it in the sky
So you can see her every morning
and plead for her 
To return each night.

When you see her scars
Both visible
And non
touch each 
gently like you might
caress the broken wing
Of a dove 
and remind her
that for every hurt
that she's survived
has only made her 
that much more unique
that much stronger.

Show her that she is worthy of love
That she deserves the love
she fears to give...
show her so that
one day after you're gone
she can find the strength 
to continue on without you.

Tell her 
that while she might not be 
a goddess above worldly desires
or poet writing alluring lines
Of passion and love
that she is amazing,
that she is astounding
for just being  herself
for being that beautiful girl
that believes herself to be damaged
when ,in truth,
She's just a different kind of beautiful.

And finally love her 
Like a boy loves a girl 
Till she finally remembers
That that's what she is 
Not a scar,
Not a goddess,
Not a star,
But a girl
That deserves to be loved.
Done in response to PrussianPersephone :iconprussianpersephone: 's piece it was beautiful and certainly deserves its acclaim, if you haven't read it please do; however I personally didn't enjoy the dependency shown in the piece. You should never depend on someone else to find even an inch of your worth because that would mean they could take an inch away.
If Prussian sees this, this piece was done out of respect for your piece's content, and please note me if you have any problems with it.

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MistressofQuills Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2014  Student Writer
Thank you for speaking. It reached my heart
Lopeny Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2014  New member
It's beautiful. Good job!
XiuLinShou Featured By Owner Sep 18, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
This is very beautiful. 
LeftUnfinished Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Love. This. So. Much.
leaada Featured By Owner Jul 6, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
that is soooooo beautiful. Hamtaro Mouse Emoji-02 (Kawaii) [V1] Ryuuko Ryuushi Mifune (Moe and feeling love) [V1] 
ieatb3ars Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2014
While this piece is very artfully written, I sincerely and respectfully disagree with its premise. 

What I find odd is how the poem operates on an assumption that because a girl is emotionally hurt, she should be loved.   While this may tug at the heartstrings with romantic imagery of a lover wiping away tears and otherwise righting the sails of a wayward ship, it is perhaps too romanticized for me.  It truly is a pity when a person cannot find their own light and I completely understand that, at times, it takes the help of others to find it.  But, this just feels like overkill and pandering to a specific audience (which is not wrong; there are probably innumerable literary pieces like this used for commercial gain).

I apologize if my words offend.  From a technical standpoint, it is well executed; I simply disagree with the message.
CrumbledWings Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2014
oops typo second line should say damaged and wouldnt
CrumbledWings Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2014
im not offended i dont mind disagreement , however you seem to have misunderstood something. im not saying she should be loved because shes damage that would help anybody. im more displayin this as a correct way to treat a girl your inlove with if shes damaged or emotionaly scared. oh and yeah it is very much pandering and have no qualm with that statment.
ieatb3ars Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2014
Oh, sorry for the misunderstanding.  I missed out on the bit that this is how to treat "a girl you are in love with" because it is not mentioned in the piece itself nor is it explicit from the title.  

Thank you for your reply. 
JessIsFinallyDeviant Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2014  Student General Artist
Amazing piece,it really can touch the heart and that's the most important in a poem in my opinion :heart:
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