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I scream
And let that thought
Hold me for eternity.
Let it embrace me
As I am left with nothing
Besides my own
wretched scream.
I scream 
While I am offered 
As a "willing" sacrifice,
To your correct society
In which the weak 
Are meant to be prayed for
And preyed upon...
Instead of helped.
I scream 
Whilst I am hunted
And ripped to shreds
While you look on as though
I am not there
As though you didn't
Choose this future for me
With your acts
With your indifference!
As though you aren't glad
That it is I
Not you,
In the mouths of these beasts.
I scream
So even if you won't see
You hear
Every damn moment
Of my end.
I scream 
So that you remember
That even in the fate 
You chose for me 
That I fought
that I lost
And that I screamed.
Okay just to be clear, I want no ice cream jokes in my comments.Got it XP?. ummmmm so yeah piece about how we all look on as the weak are persecuted. If you've seen the anime Hyouka 's (which literally translates to "I Scream") first 5 episodes you'll know where i got the emotional backbone of this piece from as that I doubt empathize with it myself.
Hope everyone enjoys XD
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AmbrosiaSweetTart Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2014
Wow another great one! You are leaving me speechless as your words scorch my soul. Thanks for sharing
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Angiebeagoodgirl Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I like this piece a lot, but I do see a flaw. When one sees the damage in society there is typically a bit of regret at having also been passive in their time of safety. I think if you found a way to work in that element it would round out the piece a bit more and make it easier to relate to. Other than that the piece is an easy read with masterful flow. Please do not be offended, I am only giving my honest opinion. I should hope you would do the same for me.
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CrumbledWings Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2014
Hmmmmmm nope not offended XD. Thanks for the comment and glad you like the piece (though i think masterful was a hyperbole :)
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Angiebeagoodgirl Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I have a talent for exaggeration but that was no hyperbole 
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kaboom360 Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2014
I liked the poem, though.
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kaboom360 Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2014
"Okay, just to be clear, I want no ice cream jokes in my comments."

I'm eating ice cream. ((OH GOG SORRY))
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X12-1992 Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Great poem
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Airema22 Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2014
I couldn't just read this in my head, I had to do it out loud. You did a wonderful job!
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Qwertynim Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2014  Student General Artist
That was awesome 
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KittySib Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2014
Intense!
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