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I want to live in a world without God
Without  the dream of Heaven
Or simple fear of Hell,
Without the love of one
Who would be so willing
To destroy under the pretense
Of a higher meaning,
Without commandments
Oppresively stopping me
From even simply lying
Even if its to myself,
To my own heart and mind
Or loving someone completely
Since he'll rip them away from me
To appease his own jealousy
Without the punishment of death
A testament to the cruelty
Of  this so called Saviour
Who would allow us to live
To fight  our battles
In a bitter world of his own design
While leaving us with
The complete certainity
That the war has already been lost .
Without the cruelty of pain
That builds with the progression of life
Mounts after every year
Attacks after every second.
I instead want to live in a world
Molded within my own selfishness
One without  children sitting on the streets
With arms so thin
They aren't be able pick up
The bread you try to hand to them.
Without doctors waiting patiently outside
For the tears in your eyes to stop
While you grip lifeless hands.
Without  having to pop a pill every hour
Just so you can take the pain away
Even if its only momentary
Even if  you know the pain is still there
Waiting behind the murky haze.
Without pretentious pastors and priests
Telling you  "Your an abmoniation"
That you've lost your chance at Heaven
Becuase you've chosen to love.

I want to live in a world without God
Without fear
Without pain,
And in this world though i  may lose my faith
Lose my hope
Lose my soul,
I'm sure I'd find my happiness
And that's enough.
OMG i can feel the religious debate and attack comments before i even submit this. I wanted to add a cover but i couldn't find anything that remotely fit this theme. This was partially inspired but yet another Regina Spektor song. I hope people are still willing to favorite this (if they believe its good) even if you don't necessarily agree with what i wrote. (ALSO I don't believe in any religion and don't feel like being converted). Hope everyone enjoys.
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SuperSayian5Naruto Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I like the poem u have written but, you should want God to be with u for eternity. Just saying, just my voice and opinion. Im not trying to tell u religion u should go with. Im just saying God is the one who u should worship more than anything. he is the perfect one. Some ppl i understand that they dont know about God. Some dont care about God because they havent been taught anything about him in their entire lives. 

I like what you done, I just cant agree with the title thats all. i understood the title when i thought and focused a little more on it.
i think is You think you can do things without God's help or something like that u guess. Idk i just was basing my opinion. Dont take this so seriously.  I am not trying to offend, hurt, cuss, criticize, or judge here. Like I said a billions times I am just bassing my opinion on what i think of the poem. Thats all ^_^
samoojatar Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2013
I think everyone wants to live in a world without pain that's the reason is being called "pain". But without pain there would be no joy or happiness either...

Beautiful work (as always ^^). 
jarredspekter Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Um...even if God exists (which I believe he does) all this would be around anyway.

What you're really saying is 
'I wish I lived in a world where I was God'

Be more specific.
Zuky2001 Featured By Owner Jul 17, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Amazing poem. But my personal belief is that our pain, our fear and the ways we choose to overcome them and face the future are what truly makes us who we are. So I don't quite agree with the last stanza. It's still very emotional and well written just remember when you are writing things like this that good souls tend to come form the worst of places. Apart from that suggestion amazing work and I'm so watching u<3<3
CrumbledWings Featured By Owner Jul 17, 2013
Well thank you for sharing your opinion and for liking the poem. (and for the watch :D). Glad you enjoyed it.
Gary-thedreamingpoet Featured By Owner Jul 6, 2013  Professional Writer
Reminded me of John Lennon's "Imagine". Nicely done my poet friend. :)
llAdaWongll Featured By Owner Jul 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I believe in God, but still a good poem. Beautiful... Great Job!!!
not-an-emo-girl942 Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow. I love this. It's so powerful and I can't even find the right words to describe it. Fabulous job. :)
RandomRadish7 Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I'm a Christian, and I believe in God and Jesus, but this poem is beautiful. (Besides the fact that you don't want God haha :) ) But yet, God isn't like that. He loves us all and the punishment we get is caused by our sins. It's our evil sinful nature, and God weeps for us. But I won't yell at you, in fact that's completely against our belief so I apologize if any Christians yell at you. We're supposed to show non Christians the kindness of a loving Savior, and reflect him in all that we do. But anyways sorry I'm rambling on. Have a nice day :D
Rigel4 Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2013
You've got agreement here.
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