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This feels like such a weak poem. I hope somebody likes it more than i do. The awesome cover image was done by `Nonnetta :iconnonnetta: . Alright hope everyone enjoys :D
(Also first piece n a while had a bit of idea loss. Not that i couldn't write just had nothing i wanted to write about that i hadn't written before.
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horohura Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2013  Student Digital Artist
It's a beauty
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RoguetheScarredAngel Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2013  Student Writer
This is a really good poem <3 one of my favorites that I enjoy reading over
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k1ttykat91 Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Aww, I like the last part
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ForgottenSea Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2013
Great piece man,really liked it
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RoguetheScarredAngel Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2013  Student Writer
how did you get the photo on there like that?
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CrumbledWings Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2013
Turn the poem into pdf first
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RoguetheScarredAngel Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2013  Student Writer
How would I do that?
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CrumbledWings Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2013
Ummm the easiest way is to first have a convertor program downloaded on ur computer (I use primopdf, takes like three seconds) and then write the poem n some type of word document, then drag the saved word document into the convertor. After that u submit the poem to the site and after getting the artists permission u can put a full length cover on it.
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RoguetheScarredAngel Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2013  Student Writer
thank you!
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parchmentgirl Featured By Owner Oct 10, 2013  Student Writer
Hi. I'm afraid I've already critiqued this over at :iconlove-original-lit: so I can't really tell you anything new here. Apologies.
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MyHeadWonders Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2013  Hobbyist Interface Designer
This i lovely!
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YaoiTotoro Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Damn that was tight! O,o
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traumereise Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
The last line bugs me, but I still love it,
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Trolls-and-Oboes Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
*cries*
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Free-to-be-me-123 Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Rainbow Tear Plz 
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pistachioSloth Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This. Is. Beautiful.
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xmadzx Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
It is very song-like to me. 
I don't know if you were going for this, but it comes off as a little childish/light, which is nice with the underlying theme of heartbreak. The rhyme and rhythm you used probably help it to be light, but the content shows the true meaning.
Very nice!
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softydrink Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2013  Professional General Artist
beautiful!!!
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62nh Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2013
I love it.
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BLS5281997 Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Oh dam this is beautiful.
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BlueFlameFTW Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
The ending was a bit abrupt, but otherwise, it's terrific. :)
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DanielOfMayfair Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This reminds me of Shel Silverstein!
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AdventurerOliver Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
They sound like lyrics to me and I actually found myself singing along to it as I read. The rhyming works perfectly for a song I think. And I have a feeling I'll have this stuck in my head now. C: 
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yo1000 Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2013
it's very cute
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Nulivero Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2013
please...
can i have your heart ? :)
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AngelicEmpyress Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2013  Professional Digital Artist
i love this poem!!!!
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92KICKSTART Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2013  Student General Artist
dang =o i liked it it was kind of cheesy but u it seemed intentionally =D
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AmazingCatherine123 Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2013  Student Writer
wow this is so neat!! ^w^
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tommyboywood Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
excellent theme idea and great preview.  some of the rhymes a bit off and could use some work on metering. with a little attention this could really excel.
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EyeGoCrazy Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist

I love the rhythm this poem has. I get the image of a weary soul looking for a safe home. It's bitter sweet message resounds with me. I like the simplicity of it, and can't help but be reminded of the great Shel Silverstein. This too breaks down complicated subject to their basic components. Relaying deep emotional pain with sense of dark humor. That allows the reader to laugh at their own heart break. 
I would have written all this in a critique, but it wasn't a hundred words. I didn't want to just ramble to make it so either.

however I really enjoyed your work and since you described it as weak, thought I might give you an honest un biased opinion. :)

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Mendedpixie Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
I really love this poem, I only have one correction: On the line "Its a defective heart", "Its" should be "It's" as in "It is a defective heart". The emotion in the poem is amazing, and it flows so well, and...I don't know, I really like it.
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mobile707 Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2013
The words read like a country music song.
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prancingdeer722 Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2013  Student Photographer
very nice !  I love it! :)  :heart:
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KittyWolfInc Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh wow, this was just amazing! I honestly cried..It's to true...Because I am this way exactly xD
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xLuckyxFridayx13x Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This is so sweet and yet sad.. <3
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RoguetheScarredAngel Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2013  Student Writer
This is...amazing. The emotion you set for this is truly strong, and the rhythm all goes in perfectly. I like the format you used too. (a,b,a,b, etc) Wonderful :clap::heart::clap:
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