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I've no talent for happiness
My smiles are frail at best
And though I try to remember
A time when I felt truly blessed
I can't 
And no matter how I try
There are always times 
When I can't help but cry,
Though even as they fall
I try to cradle the tears 
To see if I can find
Happiness beneath the fears
Reflected 
In these delicate crystals
Of hopeless memories...

But I've no talent for happiness
My heart never wholly mends
And though I dove so far
Dove until I reached the end
Of that vat of tears and miseries
I found only
More tears left to cry...

I've no talent for happiness
My soul cries endless seas
In which I try to drown
Myself and my memories,
But I think I once had it
The bliss you call happiness
And every now and then 
I feel it 
Rise to greet you
And attempt to shine 
From beneath my tears
So that you may know the truth
Of how you make me feel.

So I've no talent for happiness
My memories sometimes choke me
My hearts never wholly mends
My soul cries endless seas
And my smiles are frail at best
But I think I've finally found 
My one true true happiness 
In you.
So please stay with me
Till the day we can both smile with ease
And I can bring happiness back to you.
So yeah i wrote this XD. I know its rambly and doesn't use enough imagery but at the moment I think it sounds pretty nice ;P
Alright guys also I've been wanting to write lyrics for someone to sing. I would sing them myself but i SUCK, so if someone sings on youtube or something and you need a lyricist i am open for hire XD
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SamCTA Featured By Owner Jul 6, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
It really sounds pretty nice *0*
Perosnally I like of how the felling changes throught the poem.
Congrats ^^
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Morrigan94 Featured By Owner May 10, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
love this :) (Smile) 
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Sorcorer Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2014
I don't think this is rambly, I quite liked it.
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Precipitous120 Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2014
I sing... but I would need a beat and that would involve a whole new other person...

I wrote a song dedicated to my book... It's a song I like listening to alot... but by now I have forgotten allot of the lyrics

It went something like this:

"You Cut and you Cut and it really hurts
You Cut and you Cut and it really hurts
You Cut and you Cut and it really HUUUUUURRRRRTTTTSSSS"

Then I had my friend explaining why he has to correct me every time I'm wrong... that Ie is the cutting... Damn you Good Friends

But ya... you poem Rocks... it is what they call... a Good Poem... Good job, Well doneClap 
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HollowedArcher Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2014
I enjoyed this poem quite a bit, the romantic turn towards the end was a nice touch. The way its structured and worded is equally nice,  the despair described works well with the small moments of happiness as to make those rare moments that much more intense and emotional,  an all round good piece, great job.
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Witchtrees Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I love it! Outlet poetry is my favourite kind. It may sometimes seem rambly and lack imagery but it's perhaps the most beautiful in terms of being able to see the poet behind it. Although I can't remember who it was saying that truly good art does not reveal the artist... I'm not sure I believe that myself...
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SolumSeronix Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Nor have I. But a tedious existence is the one without happiness. So learn to laugh, if only for a short while. Because the light it sheds in otherwise dim world is priceless.
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Qwertynim Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2014  Student General Artist
I feel tht way, but I have yet to find my happiness.  Sniff*
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GoldenNocturna Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2014  Student Writer
I enjoyed the repetition of the title, as well as the title itself, for reasons similar to Gosaku's. My favorite part had to be the culmination of the second lines of each stanza into the last stanza. It made for a great buildup.
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Gosaku Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I love the fact that you sa,y "I don't have talent for happiness," as if it's something you're born with. Truly, many people are. But I think that the people who are born into some misery and pursue happiness and contentedness are the ones who get the most bliss out of it. Hell, some of the time that I feel saddened now, there's an awry feeling of glee. Hope for joy is one of my main sources for happiness, so I hope. And hopelessness is just so damn boring, so unrealistic for the living.
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