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Perfectly Shattered by CrumbledWings Perfectly Shattered by CrumbledWings

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the awesome cover image was done by *Julie-de-Waroquierand i wrote this poem two weeks ago. i myself didn't like it all that much but it felt unfair to leave my beautiful readers without a piece from me while i waited for inspiration.
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deideiblueeyez Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
This reminds me of the book by Ellen Hopkins that is entitled "Perfect" though to be brutally honest that book didn't really do it for me. This actually addresses the issue of people striving perfection but feeling empty and secretly cracking on the inside without it sounding whiny (which to be honest is what Hopkins's book felt to me. Tell me again how much it sucks to have a gay brother and parents that are never home. It's not like it hasn't been written about in her last few books... :shrug: ) . 
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lusciouslinz Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
I just completely adore this. Deeply beautiful.
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lilone71 Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2013  Student General Artist
this is beautiful and so breathtaking. we all walk our own path but i just rounded the corner from this pain and am striving forward to that cobble stone of healing.
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samoojatar Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2013
The looks are everything nowadays. Especially among the teens, but me too. Why is it so important to be beautiful outside when it's the inside that matters?

Really touching poem. It's not your best but somehow it really moved me. Thanks ^^
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theheek Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2013  Professional Traditional Artist
i love it its a great poem and so true
very moving
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tommyboywood Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
it kind of reminds me of the pressure some students feel from their parents et al to succeed. Think "Dead Poet's Society"
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deviangelica-artist Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2013
wow.. cool
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a1samurai Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I like that photoshop effect :) Cracks are fun
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kokoro13 Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2013
Where's a cool picture I clicked on? All I see is a whiney attempt at poetry.
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CrumbledWings Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2013
ouch damn, whiney huh. ;P Don't worry in the poem info i put the creator of the photo
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Deidara-Akatsuki557 Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
nice work
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dhxjcrd Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2013
Very beautiful.
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ALLsoLiT Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2013  Professional Writer
i like it.
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virtualTune Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2013  Student Photographer
very nice, reminds me of this advert in germany [link]
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Cygam-7 Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2013   Traditional Artist
Wonderful, at a time I feel this... I find the words that express it, beautifully written
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Heroes360 Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
Wow! This is amazing! Very, very, artistic! Keep it up!
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Pyrosaitan1 Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2013
I don't get it
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ImadTad Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2013
It's amazing , never seen something almost perfect as this !!
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TheJoanaPADJ Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2013
It's painful to be "perfect"...
I really like this.
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introvertwinkle Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
How did you make it have a cover outside but it's actually literature?
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Ilovetoreadbooks Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2013  Student Digital Artist
Oh wow.
That's a good oh wow bythe way...

But when i looked at the thumbnail i kept seeing a mangled hand holding like a black orb. O.o pays to take a closer look.
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cochonXvolant Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you for writing something so relatable... It's elegant as well!
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wrathblade780 Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2013
Very nice. Please view my page and comment on something if you want to. (nobody ever does)
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Iron-Goddess Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2013
very interesting and inspiring.
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AnnaRikudo Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:)
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snowfeatherr Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This is very beautifully done
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EmptyBowlOfHope Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This really opened my eyes.. about how I'm always worrying and trying to please everyone..
But I just end up being anyone BUT myself.
I guess it's part of life, idk. XP
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Blazestar13 Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2013  Professional General Artist
It gets it directly and totally precise in each line.
I would not find a better description than yours.

Really liked it, was inspiring.
Keep it up. :clap:
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InvaderZIB13 Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This is very beautiful and inspirational.
It describes the hardships and troubles and lifestyles thatmany have to face or deal with today.
Beautifully done!
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