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The Day God Cried by CrumbledWings The Day God Cried by CrumbledWings

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I wrote this on a whim.
The awesome photograph was taken by ~Abgrundlich
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WriteByNumbers Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This reminds me of a piece I wrote about the last man on earth. It has this same meaning, the same type of feel. That "holding your breath" kind of sentiment, like you're standing on a cliff, overlooking a world that has nothing left to give or take. So alone, so small, waiting, anxious almost, to be lost and forgotten with the rest of the turning earth. This is a very lovely summary of that feeling...good job, once more.

God, you got popular fast. Lucky. Also, happy birthday.
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CrumbledWings Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2012
U got popular too (1000 favs man i wish) and thank you
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WriteByNumbers Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
But it's only every now and again--you always get lots of views. :p
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CrumbledWings Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2012
I'm sure u can did again (and continually) and what do u mean always I've made 35 pieces and only 3 of them have been successes.
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WriteByNumbers Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
You've done better than I!
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CrumbledWings Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2012
Let's call it equal :D
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WriteByNumbers Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Sounds good. ;)
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BleedingSparrow Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I love it
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gaarafan103 Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2012
beautiful...well written.

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"In the dark but I see the light."
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BekahFeelsLoved Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow... i like this one :D
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NotenSMSK Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I don't get the theme. While it seems like people are killing each other and God feels sad over their deaths and the fate they chose for themselves, it still doesn't give me much background, why was the day beautiful, there were to survivors... it was a bit confusing :(
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CrumbledWings Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2012
Dude you r WAY to literal. And its not supposed to give much backdrop. If your overly analytical with poetry sometimes it loses its purpose.
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NotenSMSK Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I am not being overly analytical. I am telling what I perceived. I felt that a deeper meaning was poorly put (the less backdrop) thus I went for the literal meaning since otherwise it was just random expressions to me. Also that is my opinion, not a fact. I consider all poems the same way so that is all I had to say.
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CrumbledWings Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2012
Alright, alright (while i don't like it) your comment is greatly appreciated.
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NotenSMSK Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
You don't have to like it at all. If you want, I would not comment on your works :)
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CrumbledWings Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2012
Nah its alright i need constructive criticism
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talkingtina7 Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2012
Beautiful words. Very moving. How did you come up with this work?
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CrumbledWings Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2012
Oh i was just bored :D its how i do most of my poetry (i'm a storywriter not a poet) but i hope you'll like more of my poetry.
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talkingtina7 Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2012
I'm bored all the time and I can't come up with anything like this! Come to think of it, even when I'm not bored I can't create anything that is moving like this piece! I look forward to reading more.
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CrumbledWings Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2012
I'm sure u can make something awesome any way and i hope you like more of what i write :D
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ImpostirEvil Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2012  Student Filmographer
Oh right in the feels. D:
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CrumbledWings Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2012
the feels? and thank you (i think)
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ImpostirEvil Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2012  Student Filmographer
Feels. Emotions.
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ezek19 Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
WOOOH!!! buenísimo!!! :)
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ezek19 Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
WOOOH!!! buenísimo!!! :)
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damdadidum Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2012
:squee: :meow: :la: :woohoo:
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CrumbledWings Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2012
so...many...emoticons
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unfinishedcastles Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
aww
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Katie537 Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2012
Oh my God, this is really makes my cry! :) really powerfull! :)


Look at my photos and coment it,please:)
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CrumbledWings Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2012
I'm glad you like my work and ok i'll look at your photos
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Katie537 Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2012
;) You're welcome! :) It's perfect work! :) ;)

Thanks!:)
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AeidenGardens Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2012
I almost never enjoy poetry, but this actually made my throat close up with tears. Just, amazing. @____@
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CrumbledWings Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2012
I write alot off sad poetry and i would love for you to read my poem "The Boy Who Smiled"
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Legionofshadows2 Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2012   Artist
wow this is a really powerfull piece keep up the good work :D
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CrumbledWings Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2012
Thank you :)
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Anriu7 Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2012
a beautiful poem i can see it was written from the heart
(most poems written on a whim turn out this good if your a good poet that is)
i would love to see more of your work
-sincerely,A.
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CrumbledWings Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2012
I'm glad you think that and i'll hope you like more of my more serious works.
(also i just started as a poet, I'm originally a writer)
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Anriu7 Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2012
your welcome ill check out your page
(also I am a new member could i ask you a question or two?)
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CrumbledWings Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2012
Sure i don't mind and thanks for checking out my page
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Anriu7 Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2012
can I submit rough copies of writings for reader critique?
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CrumbledWings Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2012
Well if u specifically want a critique then u must be premium member. If u want to become a premium member u must either pay for a certain time or win a contest in which it is one of the prizes (or someone can just give you it). Other than that yeah you can do that.
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Anriu7 Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2012
ok thanks also i read some of your other poems their very well thought out and put together (the next part only from what I have read) i find that your theme focus a lot on strife hopelessness and sadness try opening up your theme area i can tell you would be good in other areas (such as love hope and happiness)
p.s. try some inner conflict poetry as well (this is poetry that involves a conflict within a persons mind, can also be influenced by outside factors though)
if im wrong about this and you do have different themed poetry posted please tell me where i can find this
-Sincerely,A.
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CrumbledWings Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2012
I do write some different theme poems check
Achitanza Dove
Conversation
Dream
Hope
But you are my poems usually stick to the overall theme of sadness, insanity, and the faults of humanity. Its not that i can't do other themes its just they don't fit me.
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tarnvogL Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2012  Student Digital Artist
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CrumbledWings Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2012
Hilarious
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Estella-Sparkles Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2012
I read it (and i barely read anything like this)
and it gave me chills
It was just that amazing.
Thank you.
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CrumbledWings Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2012
No prob and i hope you read more of my works
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neko1036chan Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2012
This is so sad but beautiful! Wonderful work on just doing it on a whim :)
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CrumbledWings Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2012
Thank you and I hope you'll read more of my serious work :D
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VEE141 Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2012  Student Digital Artist
God loves me, even though I'm atheist c:
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