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The Dragons Are Dead by CrumbledWings The Dragons Are Dead by CrumbledWings

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I'm so sorry i have absolutely been stuck on poems about childhoods (maybe since i'm sixteen and finally leaving it behind). The theme is so vast that it is so easy for me to write about. I hope everyone enjoys :D. The awesome cover art was done by *Black-Dragon-Blood.
Also not my best poem and its my first time using critique please don't be too harsh.
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General-Kool-Aid Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
This is magnificent!! I commend you for your talent. Beautiful, even for someone as dark as I. 8)
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anguiba95 Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
ooh boy, that was so sad and a true moments in our life, when someone tell any word that destroy much of your imagination
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Bapic Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
This absolutely beautiful! The emotions in this are so powerful!
Beautifully done! :love:
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gurkex3 Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2013  Hobbyist Interface Designer
this is awesome!
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Lizrath Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2013
This is so cool.
Love it ^^
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kara-li Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
wow that is beautiful!
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SubjugatedSandwich Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I, for one, think this was pretty awesome. I don't think I can give you a detailed critique because there's not much I can see that needs improvement. Your theme came across very clearly but some of the lines seem to be a little too "wordy" and might throw the rhythm off for some people. It's good to have each pair of lines have a similar syllable structure. The whole section between "My fantasies have been quieted" and "They will merely hold my tears" holds up really well but lines like the last line and "the monsters have left from beneath my bed" are a bit of a mouthful.
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foreverforwards Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2013
Those were teh times weren't they? when our troubles were always fixed by teddies and blankets could protect us?
Don't let your dragons die though, tehy're so hard to bring back to life.
I loved this, SO MUCH!
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P4incake Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2013  Student General Artist
This is just awesome *.*
Nice job :)
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mentyra Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
i love this, it's something pretty much everyone can relate to in terms of their childhood.
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