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The Dragons Are Dead by CrumbledWings The Dragons Are Dead by CrumbledWings

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I'm so sorry i have absolutely been stuck on poems about childhoods (maybe since i'm sixteen and finally leaving it behind). The theme is so vast that it is so easy for me to write about. I hope everyone enjoys :D. The awesome cover art was done by *Black-Dragon-Blood.
Also not my best poem and its my first time using critique please don't be too harsh.
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General-Kool-Aid Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
This is magnificent!! I commend you for your talent. Beautiful, even for someone as dark as I. 8)
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anguiba95 Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
ooh boy, that was so sad and a true moments in our life, when someone tell any word that destroy much of your imagination
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Bapic Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
This absolutely beautiful! The emotions in this are so powerful!
Beautifully done! :love:
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gurkex3 Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2013  Hobbyist Interface Designer
this is awesome!
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Lizrath Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2013  Student Interface Designer
This is so cool.
Love it ^^
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kara-li Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
wow that is beautiful!
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SubjugatedSandwich Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I, for one, think this was pretty awesome. I don't think I can give you a detailed critique because there's not much I can see that needs improvement. Your theme came across very clearly but some of the lines seem to be a little too "wordy" and might throw the rhythm off for some people. It's good to have each pair of lines have a similar syllable structure. The whole section between "My fantasies have been quieted" and "They will merely hold my tears" holds up really well but lines like the last line and "the monsters have left from beneath my bed" are a bit of a mouthful.
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foreverforwards Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2013
Those were teh times weren't they? when our troubles were always fixed by teddies and blankets could protect us?
Don't let your dragons die though, tehy're so hard to bring back to life.
I loved this, SO MUCH!
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P4incake Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2013  Student Digital Artist
This is just awesome *.*
Nice job :)
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mentyra Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
i love this, it's something pretty much everyone can relate to in terms of their childhood.
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RvBPhoenix Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2013  Student General Artist
I love this so much! :love: The way you describe all the childhood fantasies as dead is just amazing :D
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ab1indassassin Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
oh the FEELS!! i know what you mean when you say you're looking for your monsters from being a kid, mine were gone by the time i was 13, you are lucky. I have managed to keep my imagination, but i miss the monsters beneath my bed, in my closet and in my head. it's sad, I know, that I miss them so, but I do, I do.
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InvaderZIB13 Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This is very nice.
Looking back on your childhood does become something like that in your mind, doesnt it?
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AudeS Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2013
Interesting. The poem deals with the loss of one's childhood and the entering into adulthood or adolescence, by naming the fears which we had as childrens or by mystical creatures of the western folklore, which have been created to bring joy upon the children. The unevidable is that we will realize that all those things never existed in our world, leaving us within an harsher reality. However, the last lines indicate the regaining of those things. What we have here is interesting in another term. When our minds grow, they eventually gain the abilitity to relive those fantasies or to create new ones.
And also your work with the rhetorical devies seems to be pretty good.
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FakeTearsDryFaster Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I love this poem. Its about leaving childhood behind.
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xLuckyxFridayx13x Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I understand about writing poetry about childhood, its a theme I get stuck on sometimes because like you, I'm watching my childhood slip through my fingers. I wish I didn't have to give it up.
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Aura-Dawn Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
your second page appears to be blank
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CrumbledWings Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2013
yeah that page isn't supposed to be there, the poem ended.
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Aura-Dawn Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
Maybe if you go back and edit it, hit control end on the keyboard then backspace until the page goes away. You shouldn't have a problem. Just a suggestion, not a requirement.
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Whitewolf977 Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2013  Student Digital Artist
That was beautiful. It was a rather somber in the beginning and middle and then it has a nice uplifting end. Well done.
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