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Hey wanna trade?
I'll give you my heart
For your smile
They're both so pure 
So beautiful
I think its a fair trade.
Hey wanna trade?
I'll give my virginity
For your words
Both feel so sweet
Both make us happy
I thinks its a fair trade.
Hey wanna trade?
I'll give you my trust
For your lies
Both feel so true
Both feel so real
I thinks its a fair trade.
Hey wanna trade?
I'll give you my tears
For your devotion
Both feel so heavy 
Both feel so unwanted
By each of us
I think its a fair trade.
Hey wanna trade
I'll give you everything
For your heart
You already have two
Mine and yours.
Please?
I think its a fair trade.
A spoken word about naive love. Its also done in the same format as my other poem "Hey Remember Me?" cuz I was bored. Hope everyone enjoys.

ALSO guys just got a wattpad (www.wattpad.com/user/CrumbledW… )and i intend to portions of the book I'm working on. So if you wanna read it soon go there.
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TheWalkingFailStick Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Love this!! cx
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guldfeldt Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2014  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
I read the first two parts of the poem and I thought "aawww" but as I got further down I felt more and more of a chill down my spine. Lovely done
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HappilySleepless Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Wow.

So eloquently depressing.
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Nyanko68 Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2014
It's so beautiful and so sad at the same time ! I love it ! <3
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raberbagirl Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I'm usually not a fan of the poetry posted on this site (or even any poetry in general XD), but this is an exception, I quite like it. The irony is so smoothly presented and painful. It's sad to think of those people who are so desperate for love that they don't realize they're sacrificing too much of themselves for something that isn't even love at all....
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Sarah-chan14 Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Beautifully said :)
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Glenn-Phillips Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2014   Photographer
I've refused to read anything on DA before. This was the first. I'm so glad I read it, this is awesome<3
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cebinc Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
Wonderful!!! Sounds like so many of us can relate.
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Polaris279 Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2014
Wow, I love it!
I feel it so close to me and my experience, especially the lines about the truth traded for lies...
Well done, dear! Clap 
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TigerLove566 Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
This is so beautiful and true. Great work. :clap:
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