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I wanted wings 
To wrap me gently 
In such a wondrously beautiful embrace
Amongst the stars and angels
So I delicately ripped flight
From the butterflies surrounding my window
In the hopes they could fly me away.
I wanted to feel loved 
To feel the doting heat 
Of a lovers breath on my neck
And grasp on my heart
So I kissed the sun
And held it ever so gently
Against my breast till
It burned me away
And I could reminisce in its loving burn.
I wanted to be whole
Without flaw 
Without ugly bones to trap my soul
Without a life
So desperately wanting
Everything it could never have or be
So I embraced the seas
Submerged my entirety 
My being 
Letting its infinity 
Consume
All that would be left of me,
Till I could only 
Wash among its waves
As apart of the water.
I wanted to feel alive 
So I cut a thin line
And I grasped my own life
So I could feel every moment 
Of it slipping away.
Borrrreeeeedddddddddddddd. Inspired by PrussianPersephone , some poem she wrote had a beautiful line about butterflies wings, and that inspired my first lines from which i wrote a completely haphazard poem. To be entirely truthful , I had literally no thoughts in mind when i originally wrote this. Just wrote . No idea what it means, I'm guessing about some girl who wants things she can't have. Hope everyone enjoys XD
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SpadeAliceWolf321 Featured By Owner May 13, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh. My. God.
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Laureat Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2014
Beautiful poem  :)
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DrCrazyWolf Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
T-T soooo pretty
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CrazyMai Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2014  Student Writer
Beautiful...
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BlackSilhoutte Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Very beautiful..
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BlackGoddess13 Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2014
This is so beautiful.
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Hannahjanelee Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Beautiful peom:) How do you make the text in the middle? It adds to the poem even more, I think. 
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jmelisio Featured By Owner Mar 28, 2014  Hobbyist
This is beautifully written. Congrats, I really enjoyed it :)
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xSakuraChu Featured By Owner Mar 28, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Beautifully crafted 
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Suichu-Kokyu Featured By Owner Mar 28, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
so good :D
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FractalWords Featured By Owner Mar 28, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Loved it! Very, very good poem ^^
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SquirrelMarination Featured By Owner Mar 28, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow. Story of my life.
Very well done! It's been a while since I've read your works, but I'm more impressed than I was!
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CaptainAlwilda Featured By Owner Mar 28, 2014
You know what? I really thought that this poem was about Icarus! Do you know the myth?
He was given wax wings but he flew too close to the sun and they melt. Thus he fell in the sea and died.

Beautiful, though, really well done!
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XXXxNyanCatDreamxXXX Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
Still like it though don't get me wrong!! C:
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XXXxNyanCatDreamxXXX Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
Heh.. Breath*
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xxEmi-AnGeL-chanxx Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Really pretty :) …Just one thing it's breath not breathe up the top there...such a small niggle in comparison to this lovely poem :)
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skyla1 Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I love this so much. This inspire me to write much more lighter and beautiful tones rather than dark depressing. Really envy those who can capture the beauty with easy and pleasant words. Dark, depressing, soul wrecking is kinda like my usual cup. :( Anyway, very much in love with this. Gambatte!
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Angiebeagoodgirl Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
If you haven't attempted independent publishing you should. I'd love to see you in print 
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CrumbledWings Featured By Owner Mar 28, 2014
Don't worry i'm working on a book right now. I have some connections with random house so I'm hoping to get it published in the next two years (if i can finish it by then) XD
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Angiebeagoodgirl Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Holy smokes that's amazing!
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caatalexis Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2014   General Artist
This is absolutely amazing! I couldn't believe that you just wrote this on the fly, without an idea - because while my best ideas are normally from random free writing, I normally have some idea of what the poem is about or what I want it to be about. Towards the end, I thought that the "So I cut a thin line/And I grasped my own life/So I could feel every moment/Of it slipping away." was supposed to be something about cutting - "cut a thin line", "grasped my own life", etc. Like he/she wanted some control over her life, and so they cut, and feel every moment slipping away as the blood drained out. I don't know. Maybe it's just me overthinking. I tend to do that. "^~^
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somayia Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
amazing!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Chocoramalted Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Free writing is the best :D You did really well on this
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Lackeysan Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I can relate to this a lot.
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WhiteMinos Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
very beautiful
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NinjaSquid3 Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Beautiful Heart 
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ChiouRin Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2014
Sounds kinda suicidal... like the butterfly line though. Very pretty!
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XxFlameFrost101xX Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Ugggggghhhhhh! So much feeling for this! Made my cry a little
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Ms-Yuki-Uchiha Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
This is so good hun :)
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