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When I shall die 
I ask not for a coffin
To display my mortal body
To the Earth beneath.
I ask not for a funeral
A celebration of my life and memory
Though both would be soon forgotten
I ask not for roses nor lilies
To slowly rot away in coherence with me.
When I shall die
I merely ask for a stone
With my name etched onto its soul
And of this stone I beg,
To remember me
Remember I was here , that I existed,
For all eternity.
alright so the reason i wrote this wassssss  oaklungs :iconoaklungs: .  yes while I'm certainly not a groupie i recognize talent very easily. while my over- competitive nature is slightly envious of her ability to do what took me nearly a year n 7 months i quite personally love the fact that there's such a  successful writer on the site and cant help but feel proud. so in the greatest form of flattery i have decided to fashion my next three pieces in oaklungs style with my own remix. those who regularly read my works know i regularly change my style of writing and truthfuly i just want to try out oaklungs writing XD. hope she likes it  though this piece is obviously a failure in mimicking her style ( i made it too long). hope everyone enjoys XD
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PamFreak101 Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014
Love the simplicity, so beautiful! 
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AleisterCrowe Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Wow. I love this...
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FCFlamingCatFC Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I really like the message that this poem sends. It's short and simple, and strong. However, if you're going to be so blunt, I suggest taking more of a modern approach. You seemed to have taken more of a 1800s approach to this, ex; "I ask not for" and I personally wouldn't have done it that way. It is a very beautiful poem, and I hope you take my criticism as trying to build you as an artist, and not knock you down as an artist.
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anamsohail Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
Beautiful <3
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RozenVocal Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
This is exactly what I want when I die...
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CloudMistDragon Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2014
I feel...the same way. Great poem.
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SonicWolfyn424 Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2014
This is how I feel about my death.
This is very beautiful!!
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Dogviolet Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2014
Beautifully written! Very powerful!
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Animegirl286 Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2014  Student Traditional Artist
wow! so beautiful!! TT.TT
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hokslol Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2014  Student Digital Artist
good job like it very artistic :D
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