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Last night you gave me a star
A resplendent little light
You made it a surprise
Hiding it behind your thumb all night
So I wouldn't notice
The new twinkle
In our night's sky
Till finally
"Without further ado"
You whispered to me
As you showed me
Our own little island
In a sea of darkness and wonder.
"Make a wish"
you smiled bashfully
"Its your star after all"
And I wished
I wished a million times
On that tiny light
That one day
I might be able to give you
All the stars in our sky.
A little heart was put in this one since I was writing about my absolutely favorite topic (the sky. Dunno why its just so easy for me to write about). Done at two in the morning in two minutes while listening to fall out boys new album.
ALSO after this piece my account will go inactive for a minimum of two weeks.
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NicholasName Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I loved this. :)
This went down deep into my soul, for real.
This speaks to me a lot, and it voices a lot of my feelings and stuff.
Also, I love writing about the sky as well.
Once I woke up like at 3 in the morning, went outside, and typed a poem...good times.  :D
Matakoura Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2014
Beautifully done!!! Wow- you really know how to use words, to give them a rhythm and a pattern without losing any emotional impact or beauty. I am in awe!!
SciFi-meets-Fantasy Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Absolutely magnificent, beautifully amazingly awesome. This piece has it all. I will say that if you add,"in a little ring, to shine forever" at the end, it would have created even more emotion tenfold. Great piece.
Tarzok Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2014
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losgeloest Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2014
It's sad that you decided to go inactive for a while :(
Hope you'll come back soon. Your work is amazing :3
cancerousambition Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
BowtechInventions Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
You're making me emotional over here   /:')
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