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I'm dying
The pain seeps through
Clutching at my heart
Ripping it to shreds,
You merely watch
Pretending you're not the cuase
Seeing me die slowly
Every time you leave me,
But you return
As you always do
Slowly sucking the poison out
That you yourself placed
And i begin to forget,
Just for a moment,
And fall back into love with you again.
And with every kiss
Every time we fuck
Every second i spend loving you,
I feel the poison
Seeping back into my heart
And with everytime you leave me
i begin to die again
While you pretend not to see.
You're the poison and the antitode
My killer and saviour
The reason i want to live
While i slit my wrists,
You're my poison
My andidote
And my addiction
As i continue to drink you in
And choke you down
Alright my first poem without a cover and that's not in pdf. This change is against my will but i'm using someone else's computer that doesn't have some of the feature's my computer has and i'd rather not fuck with my friend's computer. Alright this was made for Emo-club's contest. Not my best work but i was bored and uninspired sooooo enjoy :D
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WhiteTiger246 Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
You're obviously a bitter person, i really don't give a fuck, but this is pretty good. True, i've read better, but this actually impresses me. Good job. :thumbsup:
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CrumbledWings Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2013
Your tone is so much less than complementary but thank you , i'm glad you enjoyed the poem.
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WhiteTiger246 Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
Yeah, I get that a lot. :pat:
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dirtydancerforlife Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2013  Student Writer
This is amazing,I can only imagine how good you write while you're inspired :D
This is how most of us feel most of the time,don't you think?
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MusicMauMau Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2012
I really like this, has a lot of emotion in it. Great writing, keep it up. :)
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CrumbledWings Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2012
Thank you and i hope you willing to read more of my works in the future
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deirdre-sorrows Featured By Owner Dec 25, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Lovely)
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KillerKiona Featured By Owner Dec 25, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Those are a lot of groups. XD LOVE IT!
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Icy-Dew Featured By Owner Dec 25, 2012
It would make a nice song .
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ScullReaper Featured By Owner Dec 25, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
It is beautiful :)
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GirGirl24601 Featured By Owner Dec 24, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Awesome.
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HavingADream31 Featured By Owner Dec 24, 2012
Wow...:faint:....Gorgeous!!
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Umeko76 Featured By Owner Dec 24, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
This is so beautiful! It's a very powerful poem, it would make a great song too! :D
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Abster200196 Featured By Owner Dec 24, 2012
Ya it would! :nod:
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die2live2die Featured By Owner Dec 24, 2012  Student Artist
this is the best poem i have read in a long time :D
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CrumbledWings Featured By Owner Dec 24, 2012
Why ,thank you :D
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Rymikua-Taken Featured By Owner Dec 24, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I like everything but the slit the wrist part, but that's just me. However, for an Emo contest, I think it came out very good. If it's from the heart, then I will defly say it's great.
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CrumbledWings Featured By Owner Dec 24, 2012
Yeah i thought the slit the wrist part was over the top but i was tired and running out of ideas, but i'm glad you enjoyed it. And i'd hope you read more of my less morbid works in the future :D
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Rymikua-Taken Featured By Owner Dec 24, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
You have more writings? I will definitely look at more of your work. :]
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SebbyLoverForever Featured By Owner Dec 24, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
good poem i like it
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SomeWriter Featured By Owner Dec 24, 2012
Spelling error on 'cause' and the second 'antidote'. Other than that, neat poem.
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jbombs1900 Featured By Owner Dec 24, 2012
Hey, nice piece. Little dark, BRAVO, and hey it's the holidays. So stay cheerful eh,
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Smeiksmeiksmeik Featured By Owner Dec 24, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
I'd rather sing this one than just read it out
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babylette78 Featured By Owner Dec 24, 2012
<3 it is a great poem
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RoseBell24 Featured By Owner Dec 24, 2012  Student Writer
nicely done
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CrumbledWings Featured By Owner Dec 24, 2012
Thanks , though i'll admit i didn't really try hard on this one. It could have been so much better
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fireangelswantme101 Featured By Owner Dec 24, 2012
that's sooooooo creepy
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CrumbledWings Featured By Owner Dec 24, 2012
ummmm ok did u at least like the poem?
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fireangelswantme101 Featured By Owner Dec 24, 2012
duh that's why i said " it's soooo creepy
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