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He envelops himself
in covers and darkness
lest he see the nightmares
he fears
lest he see the nightmares 
he hears.
He tells me
in pained whisper
of the hate 
discarded angels sing 
from his walls
how god damns
the souls of those 
so irreparably broken as him.
I try  fashion my love 
into a weapon that could
smite even those which god
could only nail to his walls
but my weapon is wasted
For these enemies are ones 
I'll never see.
He tells me
in weakened screams
of the love
wretched demons
whisper from darkened corners
with false faces and intentions
how only they can protect him
how he must die 
so he can be free of this burden
And though I use my love to scream
deafening hope to cloud such
cruel thoughts
I know he still hears them
still believes them.
My brother's room holds 
both heaven and hell
so he lost
all care for life
and though I try to protect
from nightmares I cannot see
I know that one day
he will leave me.
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Mishka069 Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2014
Such deep, deep emotions.... almost enoght to reduce one to tears... :'-)
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MendicantofIce Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2014
This hits pretty hard and very close to home. Provokes a lot of emotion, and it reminds me a lot of the other poem I commented on "There's a devil in my bottle". They go together pretty well, actually. This is excellently written and is easy to relate to, as someone with a mental illness and as someone with very close friends / family members with mental illnesses. There's all the love and worry and compassion of a sibling struggling to keep their loved one alive, and there's also the depressing admission that it is something bigger than they are and all they can do is be there for them.

Very well done. 
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CrumbledWings Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2014
Thank you, i'm glad the piece's emotional force transferred so easily XD
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ProjectHYPOCRISY Featured By Owner May 6, 2014
This is incredibly gorgeous. No wonder it's sparking some controversy. 
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Solvaig Featured By Owner May 5, 2014
That is a breath-taking piece of poetry. Really good.
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Silidons00 Featured By Owner May 4, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I listened to the demons once...
Never again, never again.
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JinglesKitty Featured By Owner May 4, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
If it'll make you feel any better I love this piece and believe it is extremely meaningful
 and your work makes me feel like someone understands me. (I know other ppl do but when a stranger does it's just as important)
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KyotoPhoenix Featured By Owner May 4, 2014
Whoa...

While I don't have siblings who are mentally ill, it's me who's the mentally ill one. I wonder what it's like for them, having an older sister who every so often needs to be taken care of, rather than the other way around.
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CrumbledWings Featured By Owner May 4, 2014
Well I'm sorry for your struggle. Did the piece create something (i don't know) similar to your experience? I myself don't have a mentally ill sibling however my best friend does. He's a schizo and  one time he tried to explain one of his ... nightmares (for lack of a more sympathetic word) and this was more what I took from it.
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KyotoPhoenix Featured By Owner May 5, 2014
Not something similar, but it made me wonder how my anxiety attacks must look from my siblings' points of view.
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